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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately. Do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

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The bar chart compares the proportion of people in Australia who exercised on a regular basis in 2010, according to
age
 and gender. Overall,
women
 exercised more than men. It is
also
 noticeable that boys aged 15 to 24 and
women
 aged 45 to 54 accounted for the highest percentage of the total people who did regular exercise. In 2010, over 50% of
women
 aged 35 to 64 exercised regularly, while the figures for men in the same
age
groups
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 were much lower, ranging from 39.5% to 45.1%. The 15 to 24
age
 group was the only group in which the proportion of males taking regular exercise was higher than that of females, 52% and 47.7% respectively. Turning to the two remaining groups, 48.9%
women
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age
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 between 25 and 34 exercised on a regular basis, whereas the figure for the opposite sex in the same
age
 group was only 42.2%. Men and
women
 aged 65 or older who did regular physical activity accounted for a similar percentage, at around 47%.
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