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Some are convinced that all schools should be public and free of charge because all kids should have the same opportunities. there is an opinion that private schools provide better education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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According to some ,peoples. all schools should be public and free of charge because all offspring should have the same opportunities. Others believe that private schools provide better study.I will discuss both views in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 ,if all schools are free for offspring
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 it produces many effects on learning.It is the ultimate source of increasing the education level .
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,all offspring get equal opportunity for making the path of success.
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, its effects on economic growth If we shift towards the private
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 institute many peoples have believed their education level is good . many reasons that prove it. In private zone employees are good and well educated.
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 behind people believe the private
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 provides good study .
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 employees get the
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 by cheating.they use
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 documents. Whereas in private zone many stages
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 .so the primary reason learning level is good in
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 rather than other sectors. To sum up, the private and public sectors both are the source of teaching.But
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the private
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 because in
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 all the employees who work there all have great qualities and higher
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