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Lately, more and more work are done by machines instead of human. Do you think the positive impact on the development outweigh the negative impact on individuals and society?

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In
this
 era, technology is rising at every pace, and many
machines
 have been introduced to use, which are taking place of labour, I believe it has a very negative impact on people and our society, in
this
 essay, I will share some points which support
this
 argument. Rising of
machines
instead
 of humans is the rise in unemployment, which is more critical for the nation's economy,
for instance
, recently tesla introduce self-driving vehicles, which replace the jobs of drivers or courier services. Depending on
machines
 is
also
 hazardous for an individual because it may cause laziness, and a lack of knowledge of particular works like cleaning, writing and many more. The best examples of the disadvantages of
machines
 and their effects on an individual are shown in an animated movie called "Wall-e" where we can see how
machines
 are causing problems to both society and people's health. Many believe that
machines
 can help a
company
's economy,
for instance
,
machines
 could cut labour costs and the
company
 will generate more revenue, but I have to say that
this
 is just a myth, maintenance of
such
machines
 can cost a fortune to a
company
 and
also
 it is not reliable as human.
Machines
 do not have a brain they only work on given programs and to reset those programs a
company
 have to pay some amount to the engineer, that amount is greater than the payment of nearly 10 employees. To conclude, human labour is always better than
machines
 and the positive impact of
machines
 on development never outweighs the negative impact,
however
, companies should appoint more employees and reduce the use of
machines
.
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