Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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with, I should say various nations are becoming

hemogeneous

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homogeneous

homogenous

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because citizenries can purchase the alike goods worldwide. Due to state of the art, disparate humans

intuch

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touch

each other with different

divices

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devices

, and gadgets;

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as cellphones internet,

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, etc.

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, in

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kind of relationship, people have close

communications

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, so their

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become

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convergence. Actually, I

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with

above

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notion, due to

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reasons; I will explain them in the following.

Golobalization

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Globalization

causes mankind needs similar goods, called

acommoditties

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commodities

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of all,

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necessity is sensed disparate goods should be available, anywhere in the world.

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, nowadays we can find apple

cellphone

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in each

country

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, worldwide or we can probe Indian customs in Newyork

strrets

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streets

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, different import and export companies can develop the economic situation of their

country

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by exchanging domestic productions.

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during

durring

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during

corona

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pandemic, the

cinopharm

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Sinopharm

vaccine

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was export

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export

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from china to other countries.

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, not only does the economy of countries enhance, but it

also

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make

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a lot of job opportunities for local

inhabitats

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inhabitants

. While

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the economic circumstance of a

country

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augment

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, the life level of its residents

are

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also

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ameliorated. So these reasons cause similarity between various

country

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pleasant.

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, some folks think it is better that each

country

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uses its domestic productions and avoid

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foreign

forcing

forieng

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foreign

kinds. I reckon, if a

country

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only utilizes its national kinds, likely, its procedures, will not have any international

competator

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competitor

competition

, and in

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way

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they hardly increase the quality of their

commoditties

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commodities

, or

may

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maybe

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be offer

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their productions more expensive than the actual worth,

thus

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this

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manner may not be userfriendly. To conclude, I feel any evolution activity has pleasant and unpleasant sides, but in

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issue

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the merits of the topic

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outperform

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its disadvantages.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

295 words

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