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Many people believe that social networking sites have huge negative effects on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The picture illustrates how
sugar
 is made from
sugar
 cane. As is shown clearly in the diagram, the procedure comprises a total of 7 steps, from growing
sugar
canes
 to drying and cooling the
sugar
. Looking at the graph in detail,
initially
,
sugar
canes
 are planted on farms and it takes them 12 to 18 months to mature.
Subsequently
,
sugar
canes
 are harvested by machines or farmers. The
third
 step is to crush the
sugar
canes
 in a crushing machine, transforming
sugar
canes
 into
juice
. What follows is the purifying phase, a limestone filter is used to guarantee the purity of the
juice
. When purifying stage is completed, the
juice
 is stored in an evaporator, and
this
 step is featured by heating the
juice
 and evaporating the water in the
juice
 to make it becomes
syrup
.
Further
, the
syrup
 is placed in centrifuges, which can separate
sugar
 crystals from the
syrup
.
Finally
, the
syrup
 is transported into bins and experienced a series of drying and cooling to become
sugar
.
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