today the high sales of popular consumer good reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold to what extent do you agree or disagree.

High sales of unnecessary production
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always been showing
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of advertising. While
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of folks disagree, some
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, including me, agree. Both merits and demerits are
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here, in my
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People
used to buy essential tools
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until
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be more famous with
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application
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, social media and access to
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.
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advertisement
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advertisements
not only are attractive but
also
cheerful so
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all around the world have encouraged and
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frequently about
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of them and
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enthusiastic
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to buy. Many gifted and witty
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 know about
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favour
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recognize Every bodies interest to promote in their life so they use
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like popular celebrities or
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athletes
in their advertisement and give
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attention. Whereas
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participated in some of
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, their fans think about
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event of new things and products so prefer to test and buy. To
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wrap
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had advantages and disadvantages but the benefits
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