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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the country side. Discuss both sides

With the majority of
people
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 these days moving to
city
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 from
countryside
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, there are still a lot of debates among the
people
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 to live in regional areas. While some believe living in the
countryside
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 is a better option, I,
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, agree with those who feel it's better to live in a
city
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. On the one hand, it could be argued that life in the
countryside
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 is much easier. Supporters of the
countryside
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 say that it is easy to survive in the regional area,
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, you no need to pay high rents, the vast majority of the area to live and better environment.
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, many
people
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 believe that in the regional areas we can still find glimpses of old heritage
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 as
people
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 still
follow
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following
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 traditional methods in their daily lives and
avoid
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avoiding
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 using modern-day activities.
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, I agree with those who feel life is better in a
city
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.
First
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 and foremost, we will have all types of resources easily available.
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, if we need to move around there are plenty of options available on public transport. Moving
further
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, living in a
city
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also
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 helps in any emergency that occurs
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 as if someone needs to get hospitalised urgently we can get easy access
of
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 an ambulance and that can save a life of a person.
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, the most strong benefit of living in a
city
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 is getting better job opportunities, it will be easy for any new beginner to find a job and grow in his career. In conclusion,
although
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countryside
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the countryside
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 has the cheaper way to live,
but
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living in a
city
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 will help us to improve our standard of living.
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, on balance, I strongly believe that living in a
city
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 is much better for any individual.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure
  • metropolitan
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • pollution
  • congestion
  • fast-paced
  • idyllic
  • community cohesion
  • cultural diversity
  • amenities
  • lifestyle
  • employment opportunities
  • environmental quality
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