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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

#food #drink #products #level #sugars #health #people #sugar
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are
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 controversy that many manufactured
food
 and beverage goods contain
high
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 percentage of sugars which lead to general health issues. Here,I would discuss
about
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the
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either side of
pros
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 and cons of
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 that sugary goods ought to be produced more expensive to intend
people
 to eat less
sugar
.
Firstly
, if
sugar
 goods
is
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 produced more expensive, low-income householders could not
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afford
effort
affort
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afford
 to buy
food
. Most
of
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foods
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is consisted
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 of
a
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various
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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 like
sugar
.
Therefore
,
food
price
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prices
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 will rocket
bacause
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because
 of increased
sugar
price
. Even worse, it can cause inadvertently deficiency of nutrition which cause
to
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health
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problem
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 like hypoglycemia and starvation.
Secondly
, due to
of
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decreased
sugar
 demand,
food
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the food
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 industry associated with
sugar
 might
wittness
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witness
 bankruptcy. After
then
, it will decrease
sugar
 production which lead to skyrocketing
sugar
price
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prices
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. So more
people
 can not buy
sugar
 than before. Granted, It
also
have
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positive
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 effect which
reduce
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 adult disease like
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diabetes
diabete
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diabetes
 and hypertension,and obesity. In my opinion, there are more drawbacks
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 expensive
sugar
price
 than merits in terms of
either
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people
's health and economical aspect.
Therefore
,
sugary
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the sugary
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product
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products
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 should be produced
less
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at less
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 expensive to let
people
 enjoy
food
 regardless of affordability.
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