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In the future, all vehicles will be driverless and the only people travelling inside those cars would be passengers.

#future #vehicles #driverless #people #cars #passengers
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all automobiles will be
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equipped
equiped
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equipped
 with
auto-driving
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an auto-driving
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system
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.
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, the only person who is seated in
car
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 is going to be
passenger
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a passenger
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. The argument is that if the pros of artificial intelligence cars outweigh the cons. In my opinion, definitely, the merits of artificial intelligence cars
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 more than the drawbacks of it.
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, it is
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healthier for
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the driver
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driver
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because folks do not need concentration, as they drive.
auto-driving
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system
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 allow
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a human
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human
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 to be less
stressful
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 for mental and physical health. The reason is that As technology developed to
the
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 new level,
human
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 became convenient in
every day
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 life.
Automobile
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The automobile
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 is something like that either. It
make
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possible
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 for
public
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 to be rested in the car
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 since artificial intelligence
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 all things like driving and collision prevention and auto-parking.
Furthermore
, it is better for the
next
 generation to adapt earlier. After
then
, another new
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technology
technolgy
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technology
 will be commenced with a whole new level. In terms of
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 aspect.
new
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 generation
do
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 not need a driving lesson
which
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need
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 physical and mental efforts with time and money. It
also
 has many problems like
severe
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a severe
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accident
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.
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,
in
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 the highway, mechanical
error
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 of
auto
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 can cause catastrophic disasters like
a
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multiple collisions which lead to human death and
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disability
durability
diability
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disability
. But it can be solved with many efforts and technological development. To sum
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 with all aspects,
i
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 think auto-driving car systems advantage is far more
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beneficial
beneficical
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beneficial
 than its side-effects in terms of
the
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health issues and education,
Also
 for
next
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generation
genertaion
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generation
, it is
unavoidable
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an unavoidable
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 wave.
Therefore
,
auto-driving
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the auto-driving
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system
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systems
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 should
be encourage
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to
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 the public and gradually
it
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 will replace manual-driving cars.
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