IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In many countries today, major cities have become too big and overcrowded. Why is this? What measures could be taken to reduce this problem?

#countries #cities #measures
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In
this
Linking Words
cutting edge
Add a hyphen
cutting-edge
show examples
 era, many peoples
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
shifted their
residence
Fix the agreement mistake
residences
show examples
 to urban cities.
However
Linking Words
,
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
many different parts of the world,become
to
Replace the word
too
show examples
 huge and overpopulated. I totally appreciate the statement and give relevant steps to overcome
this
Linking Words
 problem in
further
Linking Words
 paragraphs
To begin
Linking Words
 with, as a human we have a standard in a popular place are better than
a
Change preposition
in a
show examples
city no one knows about it ,
such
Linking Words
 as studying and working in
such
Linking Words
 overcrowded countries is more required .
For instance
Linking Words
, if two people have
same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
 degree but
Add a missing verb
are difference
show examples
difference
Replace the word
different
show examples
 in the place where they study
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
. That person who is studying in ah famous college they will immediately accept it rather than
other person
Change the wording
another person
other people
show examples
.
Hence
Linking Words
 the belief is that we have to change that thought and decrease the number of ignorance and that the
first
Linking Words
 thing from a large number of harmful things could happen.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, in some cities , if people give
Correct your spelling
careful
carefully
carfully
Correct your spelling
careful
 attention to unknown places that were dumped due to floods or earthquakes , they could find a beautiful space to work as well for living propose.
However
Linking Words
 , we will work on these places and clean them properly ,
also
Linking Words
 need to study about them.
For example
Linking Words
, In every
city
Add a comma
,city
show examples
 there were about 12% area is under unknown places, we should work on them .The government should take conservative
step
Fix the agreement mistake
steps
show examples
 related to it. To conclude
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
, after a
Correct your spelling
careful
carefully
carefull
Correct your spelling
careful
 analysis of the main subject, I
Linking Words
firstly
Replace the word
first
show examples
 believed that the government should take steps to encourage the community to go .
However
Linking Words
, find other useful things in the rural area ,
therefore
Linking Words
,
live
Replace the word
life
show examples
 could make
on
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the earth balanced
Submitted by kheparsahil22 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: