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the plans below show the layout of a university sport center now and how it will look like after redevelopment

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The plan displays how a university's sports centre looks now and how it is planned to redevelop
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. Overall, the plan is to become completely roofed over and multi-functional, with different types of facilities being added. The entrance of the centre is in the middle of its southern wall. Upon entering, reception can be seen straight ahead. behind reception is a 25-meter-long
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, which has a changing
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 to its west and sitting to its east. All these facilities are to remain unchanged.
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, the gym north of the
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 is to be extended eastward, and the outdoor courts east of the
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 to be removed to make
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 for a sports hall and two dance studios. these new amenities will have a changing
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 added to the south of them. there are
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 plans to demolish the outdoor courts to the west of the central
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, a new indoor leisure
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 is to be constructed, with changing
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 south of it.
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, a sports shop and cafe are to be built southwest and southeast of the reception area respectively.
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