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Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #e- #books #technology #newspaper #magazines
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In
this
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 very drastic expansion of
digital
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the digital
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 era,
people
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 nowadays can do everything they desire online, one of them is reading any kind of
e-
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e-book
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books
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 and e-newspapers. Many believe that
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 will
have
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a
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apply
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result in the loss of
habit
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the habit
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for
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of
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 buying printed
books
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.
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, the chance of
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 habitual loss will be discussed in
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 essay before reaching its conclusions. Having smartphones and laptop is a basic and common thing now. Most individuals even kids used to do their job and task using those devices by surfing
on
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the internet, including reading online.
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, paperless to save
earth
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the earth
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 is a trend now, so many individuals especially students will
favor
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favour
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 reading online, and making it into
lifestyle
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a lifestyle
the lifestyle
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. The greater thing is mostly the
books
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, publications, and other study materials can be found for free.
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, it is more practical to carry a smartphone than bring some heavy
books
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 or wide frail newspapers. Another reason is,
it
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that it
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 is faster and more effective to find some news or information needed just by typing it on google
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then
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and then
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download
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downloading
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 it.
People
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 do not really have to find it harder directly place to place to buy
books
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, let alone if the place is extremely far. Unfortunately, spending too
many times
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much time
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 reading online can cause eye fatigue,
some
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and some
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even
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are even
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 more prone to eye
damages
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damage
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.
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, some
people
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 feel nauseous and refuse not to read physical
books
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 for the sake of comfort.
additionally
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, old societies find it hard to read something virtually due to their visual condition and their lacking of
technology
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 ability. In conclusion, no matter how advanced and affordable the technology towards the existence of reading materials, some
people
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 will prefer to buy printed
books
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 or newspapers in the future due to their physically
issue
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issues
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 or preference.
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