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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Some
people
 believe that the sales of
publications
such
 as books or newspapers will be left behind because they could get it freely
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 the internet. As a response to that statement, I would like to demonstrate my disagreement. Nowadays, the use of technology has grown rapidly in many sectors, including
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publications
.
Consequently
, it is now becoming a trend that
people
 are more likely to gain some information through digital platforms rather than printed materials.
However
, the alteration of reading
habit
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 from real paper to online does not mean that the readers could have
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access for free.
For instance
, several publishers
such
 as
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pearson
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 have built
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 system where
people
 can purchase their products online and read
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 directly by their exclusive platform. By
this
,
people
 still need to pay in order to read some books or newspapers.
Besides
 some publishers
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 established web-based
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 for their business, it is
also
 important to acknowledge the work of the authors. It is collectively believed that writing is
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activities
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 that
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 a lot of
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hard work
hardwork
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hard work
.
Therefore
,
people
 should give
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honor
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 to the writers
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 purchasing their products from the official markets. It might be true that
people
 could obtain some paid
publications
 for free from illegal websites
such
 as libgen or sci-hub.
Nonetheless
,
this
 activity is rather unethical and does not show any respect to the authors. In conclusion, despite the changes
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 the
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 products from
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 to digital,
people
 should still pay if they want to get access since the publishers have established the environment for online reading as well as the acknowledgement for the authors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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