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In many countries today, major cities have become too big and overcrowded. Why is this? What measures could be taken to reduce this problem?

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It has become quite common to see a city becoming too much congested and bigger than it is supposed to be. There are many factors that can be held accountable for creating
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 a scenario. But still, there exist ample solutions for the above-said issue. Metropolitans and cosmopolitans alike can be considered as a hub for many different
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 from various walks of life contributing to quicker growth of the
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 which leads towards more job opportunities which ultimately attracts the attention of
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 from nearby areas, especially rural ones. As there are barely any
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 or facilities available in
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 an
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 which causes
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 to move to better places in search of
jobs
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 and a quality lifestyle.
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, In developing countries like India, barely a tenth of the total population desires to live a countryside lifestyle. Most want to live somewhere in a bigger city where they can have a better livelihood and get all the amenities they want.
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 a problem can easily be solved if the government decides to intervene and introduce policies that may force a proportion of industries and other businesses to shift their
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 of operation to the lesser developed regions to curb the migration rate. As
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 will start getting
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 slowly the desire to move to other places will become non-existent as all their needs can and will be satisfied in their own native
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 and the sudden shift of industries and increment in employment rate will
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 raise the economy of
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 underdeveloped areas which help them in attracting and providing better facilities and security for their residents.
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, In Australia, the government provides subsidiaries for any businesses interested in opening a branch in rural areas which has helped in boosting the growth of
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 underdeveloped regions. In conclusion, Due to the lack of
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 and facilities,
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 are forced to leave their hometowns behind and move to cities, making them too crowded.
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,
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 a problem can be easily avoided if the authorities are willing to take appropriate action.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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