Some countries pay extremely high salaries to people. Some people believe that the country must not do that and make a limit for the salaries. Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years many countries
companies
paying big
salaries
to their worker. Many people argued that the nations should make
a
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limit
for
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employees
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employee's
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wage
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and must not provide big
salaries
.
However
, I believe that paying
employer
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high
salaries
is completely justified. Providing high
wage
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to employees is beneficial for their daily
life
. When people get
a lucrative
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a lucrative salary
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salaries
, they can easily maintain their families and save
money
for their future which developed their standard of
livings
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.
For example
, if a person gets 10000 USD per month from his/her
company
, he/she can
lives
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a luxurious
life
and deposit
money
for his/her upcoming days.
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Therefore
Therfore
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Therefore
,
companies
should provide
big
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amount of
money
to
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the worker
a worker
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worker
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workers
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to sustain their
life
happily.
Moreover
, giving extensive
payment
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payments
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to
employer
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the employer
an employer
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can returns profit to
company
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the company
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as well. Workers can find joy to
work
by getting large
money
. They could
work
with more attention by
hopping
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to get
promotion
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promotions
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and improve their position which ultimately rise
companies
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financial structure.
For instance
, when employees know that they can gain a better rank and more
money
if they complete
companies
target, they will
work
with their all
engergy
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energy
to complete
first
this
target resulting in
companies
target will
be fulfil
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. So the more
competitions
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among
companies
worker, the higher profit
company
will get. 
Furthermore
, little
wage
brings detriment to
workers
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daily subsistence and
companies
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condition
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. Small paid labourer finds trouble
to spend
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their daily lives which become stressful for them and they lose
their
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interest
to
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their
work
. To
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exemplify
examplify
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exemplify
, a guard who
get
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1000 USD per month can’t sustain his daily
lives
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life
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happily.
This
may lead to their
life
under pressure
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as a result
they can’t concentrate on
work
which is harmful
for
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company
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the company
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.
Hence
,
company
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the company
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should
offers
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a standard
wage
to
employer
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employers
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according to their position. In conclusion, most
companies
give their workers a huge salary which is essential for both
company
and
employer
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the employer
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. At
last
, I do not agree with the idea that
company
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should not do that or there should be a limitation.
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  • economic inequality
  • civil unrest
  • motivation
  • productivity
  • brain drain
  • standard of living
  • societal well-being
  • tax revenues
  • public services
  • infrastructure
  • economic growth
  • consumer spending
  • meritocratic society
  • barrier to entry
  • diversity
  • innovation
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