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Media surrounds us, from the shows we watch on television to the music we listen to on the radio. How does media affect the society?

In today's advanced world, it says that it has become a small town
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 of the
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.
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 social
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 has significantly influenced the way we perceive and acknowledge the world nowadays, it
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 has a negative effect on perception. In my opinion, despite the disadvantages of
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, it raises the awareness of
people
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 who can utilize it to teach themselves new good habits and enhance their knowledge about other communities while they enjoy watching it.
Society
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 is affected by what is being presented on television, radio, and the Internet. The main benefit is that it is easier for
people
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 to learn about other countries, cultures, and societies without the need for visiting them. To illustrate, by watching a Korean drama, they can learn about Korean culture.
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, I learned about some symbols they use to express love, while it delivers different meanings,
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 as asking for money, in Arabic
society
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. In
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 way,
media
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 can enhance
people
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's intercultural communication by learning from what they watch.
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,
media
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 has influenced the way
people
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 perceive the world. Some standards,
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 as beauty and modelling, are becoming increasingly popular, especially among teenagers.
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,
society
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 now has specific rules that negatively impact
people
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's choices.
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, the image of marriage is destroyed by some tv series that represent happy marriages as two couples who are wealthy and beautiful.
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 of
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, some stereotypes and negative ideas can impact societies. To conclude,
society
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 has been influenced by the
media
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 platforms around us. Even though
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 impact is partially for the benefit of
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, it
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 has disadvantages on
people
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's perception.

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