Countries should spend money on trains rather than new roads. Do you agree or disagree

Nowadays ,there are several types of transit that people can be used
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speed ,safety and reaching their destinations without traffic inflation and dangerous driving on the roads , and these are called railway transport system and it has seen the tendency to progress in trains and high-speed metro
instead
of the traditional form if shipment like local streets and subways ,so,I agree with providing the infrastructures of metro lines more than roads ,and I will confirm my opinion though some pieces of evidence.
First
, railways can be connected long distances
withought
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traffic phenomenon alongside passengers can be more secured from accidents and dangers of driving on roads,
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, Japanese engineers have been conducted a survey that which is the preference of
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to travel by train or road and there is a tendency to use from metros ,at a result,
this
behaviour can be decreased in the percentages of accidental events in comparing past.
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, public transport is more adapted to the environment because pure energy resources have been used and decreased greenhouse gases ,so it will
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from
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global warming ,
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, German engineers have established the new version of engine motors on their trains and they have been succeeded reducing in production of greenhouse gases ,
however
, local accessible way is needed to connect domestic places for citizens ,but , these are more suitable in internal city shipping
instead
of metro lines,so the size of a town is important to choose which form of ways are effective for people. To sum up, allocating
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budget must be more spent on high-speed railways that are secure and convenient alongside connecting long distances in little time ,
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furthermore
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this
structure is adapted
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the planet.
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