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In some offices, employees work in enclosed workstations or cubicles. Other offices have a more open design, in which there are no walls separating employees from their coworkers. Which type of arrangement do you think is most effective? Explain, giving reasons to support your answer.

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The pie charts illustrate the
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 for
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 to travel to
work
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 by bicycle or by
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 in percentage. Overall,
people
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 choose cycling to
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 for health and environmental
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, while the
people
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 who prefer driving to
work
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 mention comfort as the main reason. The
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 chart shows that 30% of
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 put health and fitness as the reason they choose to ride a bicycle to
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. An equal number of
people
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 cite cycling produces less pollution compared to other modes of transportation. The lack of parking problems accounted for 15% of the
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, while slightly lesser at 13% mention no cost as the reason. The smallest portion, which is 12%, considers cycling is faster than driving. From the
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 chart, it can be concluded that 40% of
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 choose to drive a
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 to
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 because it is more comfortable. 21% mention that the distance to
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 makes them prefer a
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 to a bicycle, while 14% argue that a
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 is more convenient when they need to carry things to
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.
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, 14% of the
people
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 say that driving is faster than cycling.
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, the smallest group of
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, which is 11%, choose driving for safety
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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