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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problem. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #drink #products #levels #sugar #health #people
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Nowadays, there is more and more
sugar
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 in
food
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 and
drink
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 goods that makes nations become fat or get heart diseases.
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 raising the price of high levels of sugary goods might help nations eat less
sugar
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 to keep healthy. It
is disagreed
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disagrees
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 that more expensive sugary
products
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 will solve the health problems. More expensive
sugar
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 can force people to choose healthier
food
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 or
drink
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.
Sugar
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 usually tastes better than other
products
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 and high-
sugar
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 goods cause a high risk to get diabetes or obesity. High prices force nations to choose better
products
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 which are healthier with better quality.
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, fast
food
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 is affordable but contains more
sugar
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 and salt. folks want to save their time and money.
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 they choose to eat that. If the prices are higher, people might have a healthy diet in their homes. The high price of the
food
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 might not be affordable to some communities. There are still many poverties in the world now. High-
sugar
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food
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 is the most efficient way to feed ourselves.
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, we only need to eat one cholocate energy bar or
drink
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 some energy
drink
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 when we are hungry in order to continue our work.
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, bioproducts are more expensive. If we raise the foodstuff prices that might cause starvation worldwide. In conclusion, I believe that raising the price of
products
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 which contain high levels of
sugar
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 has a good impact on the health of people. But that will not solve
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 problem for all. We need to learn about a healthy diet and let
food
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 be more affordable to the poverties.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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