In traditional or religious festivals. during festival periods people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves to what extent you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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day and age, the vast majority of

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attend religious or traditional-based festivals merely for fun. and they don't recall the background story that lies behind these

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anymore. I agree that during festivals attendees just want to have a good time,

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, I disagree that the meaning which lies behind these

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has been forgotten. Primarily, many historical

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are taught in depth to children from kindergarten to even college majors in different ways, namely via shows,

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projects and

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subjects. If the meaning behind was forgotten,

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they wouldn't have been celebrated anymore! I personally know many non-Christians that not only celebrate Christmas but

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are aware of its details. other ceremonies

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as the bonfire or Yalda night and Nowruz are being celebrated globally and explained in detail with the help of social media and the

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's special programs.

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; Nowruz ,the Iranian New Year, is celebrated in the White House annually.

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, I believe that traditional and religious

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are not taken seriously, it's a decent place for folks to gather and get away from polluting poisonous thoughts and

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arms us with a great opportunity to mix with new

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as well. I personally attended a festival called bonfire

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year and I didn't pay any heeds to the history behind it but, I made so many loyal and caring

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and I was filled with joy. another salient point to bear in mind

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is that many of those who participate are neither religious nor interested in any kind of background history. In conclusion, I agree that some group of

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attend festivals because they want a colourful and fun place to meet their friends and clear their head from stressful thoughts,

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, I stand against the idea that the background of

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are forgotten because they are taught in

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people

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speak about them in social media and some TV programs.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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commercialization
cultural heritage
globalization
individualism
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media influence
traditional customs
religious significance
contemporary festivities
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preserving traditions
generational differences
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