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Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart displays the amount of various digital
games
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 selling over a period of 7 years all around the world. It is clear that handheld
games
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 are the most profitable type of game through sell's charts illustration, producing approximately two to three times more profit than the
second
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 most profitable every time in the seven-year period. In the stage 2000, there was a negligible amount of difference between sales rates for online and mobile phone
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.
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, as time passes the figure for these two
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starts
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 to rise, until
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 overtaking console
games
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 in the year 2005. above
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all The figures peaked at approximately 7 and 9 billion dollars in the year 2006, but are still much lower than the figure for handheld
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, which has about 17 billion sales. It is noticeable that game consoles are the only type of product that has an increasing trend among the four during the period. Most of the
games
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 had an increasing figure during the years.
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