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Some people believe that it is beneficial to play sport in a team rather than playing an individual team. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #sport #team
There are different types of
people
 around the world.In my point of view,some
people
 prefer to keep doing
things
 they are familiar with that
things
. others are trying new
things
 example,visiting new tourist spots, and eating different types of foods because It will be very interesting to do it. From that, They will get satisfaction. Another side of
people
 is always willing to do familiar ones. Because it is quite easy to do the same work again and again. Since they had a great idea about that place so that they can calculate The exact budget of the trip before itself
Moreover
, it is less complicated and more convenient. According to my way of thinking,
people
 will get bored due to doing the same
things
.Humans are more well-blessed creatures than others in The world.so we should explore different kinds of objects as much as possible throughout our lifetime. In conclusion, it is their own right to do
things
 in which way they want.Nobody should interfere
also
 we have to support them to do
things
.
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