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In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are tbses problems? How might they be reduced?

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It is a worrisome but genuine trend that countries experiencing rapid economic growth develop urban lifestyles more than those in rural
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 do.
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, the lack of opportunities and amenities in rural
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 that abound in cities prompt massive rural-urban migration.
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 demands a fair distribution of
wealth
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 amongst all citizens regardless of their location in the country. Flourishing economies of countries do not mean that every citizen is benefiting equally as city dwellers seem to benefit more than those in rural
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 do by having better
qualities
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 of life and services.
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 migration as people flock to urban
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 in search of better livelihoods.
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, if rural people in the Eastern Cape Province are not receiving the same amenities as those in urbanised provinces, they will opt to move.
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, urban overpopulation and shantytown development are some of the downsides of
wealth
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 imbalances and different
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 standards in South Africa. Research shows that
wealth
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 distribution needs to be reviewed to curb
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 clear anomaly. Decentralisation is one of the solutions where rural
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 benefit from investments
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a university
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university
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universities
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 or research facilities
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are
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built closer to them.
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building state-of-the-art facilities in the predominantly rural Limpopo province and not in Gauteng province. Lack of amenities results in brain drain from rural
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.
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, building new and upgrading existing facilities in rural
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 can be a solution to elevate the standards of rural dwellers. In conclusion, regardless of their locality, unless the living standards of all citizens are uplifted and not only for those in urban
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, there will always be rural-urban migration leading to urban overpopulation.
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, socio-economic hardships experienced in urban
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 are largely due to the unequal
wealth
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 distribution in a country.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
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