Some people think job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others think that people cannot be expected to enjoy a job satisfaction and having permanent job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is believed by certain individuals, that
job
gratification is more paramount while others opine that
work
security is much better than the pleasure that comes with it.
Although
satisfaction from
work
is important and leads to happiness and
career
advancement, in my opinion,
permanent
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job
ensures
steady
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a steady
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income and
rest
of mind. On the
one
hand, some
people
believe that gratification from
work
is essential as it leads to them being happy.
That is
to say, when
people
gain a
job
that is
accompanied
with
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all the substantial benefits they look out for, they feel overwhelmed in life and as
such
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they are always fulfilled and happy carrying out their
task
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everyday
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.
Also
, it
clearly
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evident that
people
who are happy and satisfied with their employment, tend to move
further
in their
career
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careers
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.
In other words
, individuals will
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always
alway
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always
acquire more skills and
degree
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degrees
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to avail them
put
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more effort
in
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into
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their
work
and achieve their stipulated goals,
hence
subsquently
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subsequently
leading to more
fulfillment
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. Take
for
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instance, a survey conducted in an oil and gas company in America revealed that
majority
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of their employees are improving in their
career
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careers
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by bagging more degrees due to the pleasure
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they
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the
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they
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derive from their
job
.
On the other hand
, a secured
job
will always ensure
steady
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in-flow of money and
rest
.
Firstly
, when an individual's
work
or contract is safe and secured without interruption, the employee is sure of
steady
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a steady
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monthly
fund
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funds
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into
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his or her pocket and as
such
do
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not need to beg or borrow money from neighbours.
Secondly
,
permanent
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a permanent
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job
bring
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about
rest
in the life of the
people
.
This
means that a lifetime
job
without
threat
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the threat
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of termination at any point and
one
which encourages retirement ensures adequate peace of mind for the populace.
Therefore
, individuals
does
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not need to jump from
one
place to another in search of
work
. To exemplify, a report from Sun newspaper showed that in Japan, citizens do not move from
one
organization to another rather they spend their lifetime in a particular
job
. In conclusion, in as much as satisfaction in a particular
job
brings about happiness and
career
upgrade, I think that continuous salary and
rest
of mind which is attributed to a secured
job
is more
cruical
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crucial
critical
.
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