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Some people belive that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

#people #belive #children #home #child #development #school #methods
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the comfort
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 zone is the best option for
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children
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 development according to numerous
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people,
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 many of them believed that going to
school
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 is the best
way
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 to
learner
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the learner
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 to upgrade their
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knowledge
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knowledge
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believed
believe
belived
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believe
 that going to
school
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 is the best
way
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 to uplift the
kids
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kid's
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 development. To start, learning
in
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at
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 home is a lot of benefits to the child and parent because they save time in
traveling
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going
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and going
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 to
school
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everyday
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.
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, expenses of fair going to
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 and allowance of the child
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..
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, nowadays because of
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the pandemic
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pandemic
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, schools are offering distance learning to prevent the transmission of
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the virus
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virus
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viruses
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 to
individual
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individuals
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,
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 scenario gave
positive
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a positive
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 outcome to both parents and students because they save effort and expenses going to
school
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.
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, attending class in
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face to face
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 study has
also
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a
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apply
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lots
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 of benefits specially
to
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for
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children
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.
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, pupils can mingle
their
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with their
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 classmates and
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 may lead to the kids
become
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friendly
freindly
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friendly
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second
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the second
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 reason is learning in
school
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 is the best
way
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 for
children
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 to become
competent
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 because they learned as a group.
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, foundation day has a lot of games and academic
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competition
competation
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competition
, so the child
is involve
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with
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in
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 that
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competition
compitation
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competition
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 practice made them competent in the future. To sum up,
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learning
learnig
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learning
 in
school
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 is the best
way
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 to uplift
children
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 in
holistic
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 approach, that,s the reason why
i
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I
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am prefer
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 to send the kids to
school
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 rather than studying at home.
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