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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?

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Question With the increased global demand
in
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oil
 and
gas
, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree? Response
As a result
 of
high
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the high
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 demand
in
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for
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oil
 and
gas
 worldwide, undetected regions of the universe should be given access to the reserve
in-order
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in order
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 to obtain more supplies. I believe
this
 will benefit a larger population and
also
 prevent some gangers;
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a detail
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detail
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 explanation will be given in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, the
product
 should be made available and easily accessible. Fuel
availability
 enables easy movement of goods and services from one location to another.
For instance
, whenever there is
scarcity
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a scarcity
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 of automobile
gas
, a journey of about 30km
cost
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costs
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 up to thirty US Dollars in Nigeria.
Secondly
,
availability
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the availability
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 of premium motor spirit will prevent the
product
 from being adulterated by marketers of the
product
. In an attempt to generate high income, some marketers mix fuel with other
product
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products
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 and
sale
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sell
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 to buyers.
Finally
, if the
product
 is readily available,
this
 ingenuous act will be avoided.
Furthermore
, hoarding of
oil
 and
gas
 will lead to scarcity.
This
 is curb when other places around the world are open for exploration and refining of the
product
.
For example
, crude
oil
 was discovered in
olo-ibiri
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Olo-ibiri
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 in Bayelsa State, South-south Nigeria many years ago,
this
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and this
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have
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 led to
accessibility
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the accessibility
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 of fuel all over the country.
Lastly
, illegal method of the delving of
gas
 often results in water pollution.
This
 leads to
destruction
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the destruction
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 of aquatic
lives
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life
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. In conclusion, because of
huge
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the huge
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 demand
of
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 premium motor
spirit
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spirits
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, undisclosed places within the world should be granted
privilege
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the privilege
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in
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of
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 getting some quantity of the
product
. Though hoarding of
this
product
 will lead to scarcity,
but
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however
 its
availability
 and accessibility will enable easy movement of goods and services
as well as
 individuals. I
therefore
 opined that Governments at all levels should ensure
availability
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the availability
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 of
oil
 and
gas
. word count, 315 words.
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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