You have seen an advertisement in Australian magazines for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child write a letter # Explain why you would like this # Give detail of why you are a suitable person to employ # Say how would you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Jane Tompson, I have seen an advertisement about the opportunity to live in Perth with your family looking for children. I am a Ukrainian expatriate. I have just arrived in Australia and I am looking for a new job. I have a job experience as a nanny for over 5 years, including the AuPair program in the USA.

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, I have a strong knowledge of English and French languages, and experience as a tutor of mathematics for

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grades.

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, I have a recommendation letter from a previous family. I moved here for a reason that my boyfriend got a job offer in Perth, so it is essential for me to have days off to meet with him. We planning to spend a year here in Perth investigating the surroundings and Australian nature.

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summer we are going to move to Sydney but so far I am highly interested in your offer. Best regards, Darria Sky

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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6 paragraphs

157 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?