Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many wild species are endangered due to modern technology.The
Zoos
have safety and protection for
animals
,
still
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animals
are suffering in the enclosure and being treated cruelly.
Although
they protect
wild
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animal, in my,opinion wild
animals
belongs in the forest and their natural habits should not be disturbed.
To begin
with, wild
animals
are captured and kept in small enclosures in
Zoos
.They are not provided with proper food.
For example
, on average male lion eats 15kilograms of meat every day but very few
zoos
are economically stable to provide the lions with
such
a huge amount of meat.
Moreover
,to boost their revenue
Zoos
are even extending the visiting hours, which is leading to the mental illness of
animals
.
For instance
, giraffes are placed in very small enclosures so they are visible to visitors because of
this
reason they are suffering from mental trauma and neck injuries sometimes as they try to escape.For the above reasons
Zoos
must be shut down. On the one hand,
Zoos
provide shelter to endangered wild
animals
.Fashion industries are using animal fur,tusks etc to make
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expensive products because of
this
demand for
animals
in the black market has gone high.
For example
,as per studies hundreds of elephants are killed by poachers every year for their tusks.With the advanced ,technology many bird species are endangered,so bird sanctuaries should be set up
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city outskirts to protect them which ensures our future generations
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a chance to see them.For these reasons only endangered wild
animals
can be kept and taken proper care
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under the guidance of the government making sure they are well treated. In short, though
zoos
provide
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protection we must not disturb the natural habitats of wild
animals
.In my opinion,
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zoos
must be shut down so that ecosystem will not be disturbed.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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