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Writing Samples
Band 5

There is a problem in your street. Write a letter to the local town council explaining who you are, what the problem is and what you hope will be done about it.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to complain about the couple of problems which we are currently facing in our area. My name is Arsalan Farooq
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 I am living
in
Change preposition
on
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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19th
street
Fix capitalization
Street
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of
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in
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defence society
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Defence Society
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.
Furthermore
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, I am the concerned person collecting the maintenance funds and taking care of the town. Recently, there was the construction of a new building near my house and
due to
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working
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the work
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 of the heavy machines, I have seen
the
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that the
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 surface of the road has been damaged so badly.
As a result
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, there are many potholes in it, which hinder the flow of traffic and create congestion problems in the area.
Also
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,
due to
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 the dense population, the sewerage system got affected
awfully
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badly
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 and it
remained
Verb problem
fell
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 no more up to the mark.
Therefore
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, the dirty water is always running out from it and causes numerous hazardous diseases which are deadly to health. You are requested to look into
this
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 matter and send the maintenance team in order to repair the poor street and clear the sewerage lines as well. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Arsalan Farooq

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task response
In task response, make clear what you ask and say the exact action you want, like 'please fix the road and clear the sewer by [date].'
coherence and cohesion
In coherence and cohesion, break the letter into two ideas (road work and sewer) and use link words to connect ideas.
tone
Formal tone and good use of opening and closing.
content
Clear goal to ask for action from the council.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Local council, town hall, representative, official address
  • Infrastructure, amenities, public services
  • Road maintenance, potholes, resurfacing
  • Streetlight, illumination, lighting outage
  • Noise pollution, disturbance, decibel levels
  • Health hazards, safety concerns, risk assessment
  • Remedial action, corrective measures, enforcement
  • Communication, response, follow-up
  • Pertinent, urgent, pressing issue
  • Resolution, rectification, amelioration
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