Some people think that to be successful in sports ,people should have physical strength ,others believe that mental strength is more important.Discuss both views and state your opinion.

As of result of
sport
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activities requiring
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manpower
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man power
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,a minority of
persons
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people
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feel that for
success
to be achieved in the sporting world ,
individuals
should possess physical
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strength
strenght
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strength
,while the majority of
individuals
think that the possession of psychosocial ability is more essential , as
this
will help in decision making.in my opinion,I agree to the latter. On one hand,
majority
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of games that have to do with
sport
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activities are that which needs physical
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strength
strenght
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strength
.if;
individuals
are to participate in
such
sports
,there is
need
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for an optimum
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strength
strenght
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strength
level.
This
;is based on all
sports
competition
requires
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a high level of
sustainance
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sustenance
sustainable
.Meanwhile,
this
is only seen amongst those
are
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who are
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strong bodied
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and can withstand any stress
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encountered
encounted
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encountered
.Take
for
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example,the football game in Nigeria,
this
activity is one that lasts for an overall time
if
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of
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90 minutes.
nevertheless
,for members of the team to achieve
success
,they must possess an endurance skill.,whereas
this
skill is only seen amongst
that
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those that
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have
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who have
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the
man power
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manpower
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.
On the other hand
;mental ability is the other reason why the other group of persons are opinionated that it is more necessary to achieve
success
in the sporting world.if,
individuals
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psychological strength is well intact,
in
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it will aid a good decision making.
however
;
this
is because making decisions is the peak of all sporting
competition
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.
additionally
;mental health is a very important aspect of
individuals
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individual
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well being.meanwhile;a deficit in an individual mental power can affect their decision making and
this
is Paramount in the
sport
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profession.Take
for instance
;
in
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tennis,the player
have
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has
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to be able to decide on how to play and the tactics to use. In my opinion;I concur
to
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the view that mental strength is very necessary to achieve
success
in
sports
.
this
is due to the use of the brain
is
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essential for all physical activities as the brain controls balance. In conclusion;
individuals
that are into
sports
should always see to their mental health as
this
sustains their
psyological
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psychological
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strength
strenght
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strength
.
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