Some people think that offenders should be put in prison. Others, however, believe that providing offenders with education and training is more effective than putting them in prison. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are some strong opinions about whether to provide criminals with rehabilitation rather than imprison them. I will discuss both views in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, providing education and training is suitable for those who commit minor
crimes
such
as shoplifting or pickpocketing. Because they are who do not have money in order to meet their basic needs, they commit minor
crimes
such
as shoplifting or pickpocketing. After receiving the
punishment
, they can have rehabilitation programs to improve what they did wrong.
Moreover
, when they finish
this
, they can get a job to earn money.
For example
, according to a recent survey conducted by the National University of Vietnam, 65% of minor
crimes
compensate
for
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victims and get a job to meet their basic needs.
Secondly
, serious
crimes
such
as robbery or murder,
they
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must
be imprison
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. Because their
behavior
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affects the security of society. And they must be responsible for their
behavior
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. If they do not receive
punishment
, it will become too unfair to the victims. The victims will live with the harm caused by serious
crimes
.
This
will affect the social order when serious criminals do not receive proper
punishment
.
This
poses a serious threat to society.
For instance
, the economic researcher of the ABS University of Vietnam did some research about 70% of people living in the city fear when the big criminals have not been jailed. To address the problem, serious
crimes
receive the
punishment
of imprisonment. In conclusion, it seems evident that both views have their own unique advantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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