As computers and technology develop, they can be used to teach children and teachers won’t be necessary soon. Do you agree or disagree?

In the modern world, everything is based on automation.Every day it is changing according to the needs of human beings.We are totally dependent on it.
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the advent of machinery.Now everything is based on
computers
.Even computer and machinery development spark heated debate.Some people think that with the advancement of
computers
and technology children and teachers won't be necessary.But I am strongly against
this
view and there are numerous reasons.
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,
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their work and even
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future.Recently what we have seen.In Covid time when everything
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human being.No one is allowed to go outside.But
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totally changed the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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