People today find their lives more and more dominated by their jobs. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the current situation, more folks are working constantly to secure jobs for their livelihood.
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, they are overwhelmed with the workload that influences a person's daily life. In
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with, young adults prefer to relocate to big cities for living
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lavish growth. To fulfil their dreams, people work around the clock to match the living standard of urban surroundings.
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, the cost of living in metros is way high for families to survive,
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they will end up working overtime at offices for extra income.
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, a recent survey found that most individuals spend half of their salary by mid of month paying their expenditures and children's schooling, which makes them work after office hours.
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,
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is getting very
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competitive
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competitive
and everyone is struggling to secure their jobs in their current organization, so
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the person
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person
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people
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will go
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mile to please the management.
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, at the rate inflation is growing,
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the community
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can foresee the recession, and
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the insecurity of the retrenchment make employee work harder than before.
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, in a recent situation of
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many companies have
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their budget and rate of the retrenchment has hit
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high in 2021
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compare
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compared
to 2019.
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to secure the position
humanbeing
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human being
are spending more
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at their workplace. To conclude, it's true that workload is dominating
people
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life and impact their health. In my opinion, as
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mentioned
above, I
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to agree that
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the workplace
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have
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more influence
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human livelihood.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dominated
  • encroaching
  • leisure activities
  • continuous availability
  • productivity
  • remote and hybrid work models
  • blurs the boundaries
  • accessible
  • employment insecurity
  • gig economy
  • work-life balance
  • flexibility
  • automation
  • decrease workloads
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