Some governments spend a lot of money on exploring space. Some feel that this investment is justified while others think that money should be spent on public services like health care and education. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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government
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is spending a lot of
money
on exploring
space
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exploration is important while others argue that,
this
money
should be spent on public services. I completely opine that it is better to explore other planets.
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Firstly
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could find another planet which is suitable for humans to live on. Due to the growing population of the world and its effect on the
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the need for another place to live
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has inclined.
In addition
to what I have just said, we can find out about new things in the
space
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, it was written in a magazine that, a new chemical was found on Mars that can help to prevent cancer. In the forthcoming; paragraph I could deal
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spending
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money
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Although
travelling to
space
is really important,
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should spend
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other things like building new hospitals and schools. Having healthy people that have good knowledge in their field is very important for a country. If we want to progress, we need healthy human beings.
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, people have the right to have good facilities on the grounds that they are paying taxes.
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money
is needed. To conclude, gone is the idea that travelling to
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not needed. We all know human activities lead to harm
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Earth so we need to find
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to survive.
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