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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary epoch, the public argues that professionals must
work
 in the
country
 where they did their training while others feel that they should have
freedom
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 to
work
 in another
country
 if they wish. In
this
 essay, I will outline both sides and elaborate on my views. To commence with,
people
 who believe that these professionals can contribute something if they begin their career in the place where they did their training. From a positive perspective, the
country
 can use their skills to boost the economy in order to compete with others developing countries.
For instance
, Dr Amalina who was once a graduate student in the UK started her career in the UK
instead
 of serving her homeland. It poses a prominent to ensure these kinds of situations will not happen in the near future because the
country
 cannot afford to lose these kinds of
people
 anymore.
On the other hand
, the right to choose the
country
 is on the
people
 themselves. It is not a crime to serve other countries as long as they can gain knowledge from what they are working on.
As a result
, one can broaden their perspective and widen their horizon.
For instance
, the individual can apply their experience to other companies once the previous contract with the current company end. In conclusion, there are several issues that we had raised in the essay to ensure better insight for
people
 who desire to start their
first
 career place. In my opinion, there is nothing wrong with both issues as long as
people
 can
work
 comfortably at the place they wish to
work
.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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