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Some people believe that space exploration is beneficial to humanity. Others, however, think that it is useless. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Investigating the space via cutting-edge probes and allocating a great amount of national currency, the opponents think
this
 is a futile deed which imposes heavy taxes on them.
However
, the advocators ,including me, have their own justifications. In the following essay, both pros and cons will be elaborated on. In fact, there are two major drawbacks in relation to space research.
Initially
, these kinds of explorations would be costly noticeably. Since not only the preparation but
also
 the accommodation as well as spaceship maintenance fees are heavy for the politicians. Another disadvantage is insecurity. No one can predict how hazardous might these examines to be. As there is no guarantee for neither the astronauts nor the spacecraft. So, these investigations are not convenient and secure. On the other side of the coin, the universe eagers, like me, do believe that the galaxy excavations have two significant privileges for human beings.
Firstly
, scientists may be able to tackle the issue of overpopulation in near future by conveying people to a planet quite similar to ours in terms of natural resources
such
 as water, food and energy. The other thing is that if we inform more about unknown locations in milk way galaxy, there will be captivating tourist destinations and
this
 is not a far-fetched dream anymore. To recap the main points from what was mentioned above, it can be concluded that regardless of having high expenditures and being perilous, space searching would be beneficial in case of finding additional energy sources and
also
 the growth of the tourism industry.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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