In many countries today, major cities have become too big and overcrowded. Why is this? What measures could be taken to reduce this problem?

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modern era, where urbanisation is increasing day by day because of the facilities which are only available in
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. For a purpose of taking those
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amenities
, people preferred to migrate to big
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of their country. Various causes are associated with
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notion but
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problem
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can be eradicated by taking some stringent measures. I will discuss my viewpoints in
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paragraphs. The list of reasons
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moving to urban
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is
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.There are many provisions which are not available in
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the mind of
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fail to get a good quality education
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their future and learners fail to get a job in higher positions because of enough knowledge.
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, in big
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,
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lots
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of job opportunities in public as well as in
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sector which give
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good pay to their employees and
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easily
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fulfil
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their basic requirements .
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why
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the
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huge amount of masses are moving to urban
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. One
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of Punjab's city
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where millions of
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population
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is reside
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their
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because
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too much work is available
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for educated and
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people. Government
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to root out
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problem
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by taking some simple steps. The higher authority should
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a
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education
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proper study to learners .
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, the
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foreigner
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industry should invest their money in villages and establish
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companies which
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to reduce the level of unemployment
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people.Those things
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to overcome the migration.So, Government should come
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the front to solve the
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of urbanisation. In conclusion, there is no denying the fact that
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problem
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has taken the
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face
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nothing is insurmountable. So, it is possible to remove the
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of
overcrowed
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overcrowded
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of
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big
cities
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if
government
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the government
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do some efforts.
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