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In many countries today, major cities have become too big and overcrowded. Why is this? What measures could be taken to reduce this problem?

#countries #cities #measures
In
this
 modern era, where urbanisation is increasing day by day because of the facilities which are only available in
cities
. For a purpose of taking those
amanities
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amenities
, people preferred to migrate to big
cities
 of their country. Various causes are associated with
this
 notion but
this
problem
 can be eradicated by taking some stringent measures. I will discuss my viewpoints in
coming
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 paragraphs. The list of reasons
of
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for
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 moving to urban
areas
 is
never ending
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.There are many provisions which are not available in
remote
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area
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that
is
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effect
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affect
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 the mind of
populance
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populace
. Lack of education
insititutes
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institutes
 and study material in rural
areas
 schools and students
are
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fail to get a good quality education
that
is
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directly
effect
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 their future and learners fail to get a job in higher positions because of enough knowledge.
Also
, in big
cities
 ,
alots
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lots
a lots
 of job opportunities in public as well as in
private
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the private
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 sector which give
a
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good pay to their employees and
they
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 easily
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fulfil
fullfil
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fulfil
 their basic requirements .
That is
 why
,
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the
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a
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 huge amount of masses are moving to urban
areas
. One
examples
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 of Punjab's city
ludhiana
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 where millions of
polpulation
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population
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is reside
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their
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 because
of
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too much work is available
their
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 for educated and
non educated
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non-educated
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 people. Government
help
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 to root out
this
problem
 by taking some simple steps. The higher authority should
built
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a
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apply
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education
insititutes
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institutes
 which provide
a
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proper study to learners .
In addition
, the
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foreigner
foreign or
foreignor
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foreign
 industry should invest their money in villages and establish
a
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companies which
assist
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 to reduce the level of unemployment
of
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in
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 rural
areas
 people.Those things
are
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help
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 to overcome the migration.So, Government should come
on
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 the front to solve the
problem
 of urbanisation. In conclusion, there is no denying the fact that
this
problem
 has taken the
monsters
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 face
however
 nothing is insurmountable. So, it is possible to remove the
problem
 of
overcrowed
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overcrowded
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of
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apply
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big
cities
 if
government
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the government
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 do some efforts.
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