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Some people think it is important for children to take lessons outside the classroom, for example by visiting places such as local companies or public buildings. Do you agree or disagree?

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Children
 are the future of tomorrow, learning in a different environment from where they would regularly study would allow them to explore and assimilate differently. I would state that I strongly affirm that it is valuable. My essay would aim to expatiate more on my stance. Studies outside of the same location will be more engaging for
children
. The common distractors a child would encounter while at school, would be eliminated .
This
 would in turn allow the child to have maximum focus on learning while sidelining detractors.
For example
, in classrooms seating is the same all the time, the pupils
also
 go over repeated routines daily,
that
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 can become boring. It gets harder to keep
children
 engaged . A different learning experience might be what is needed to restart their batteries again.
Also
, due to the disparity and differences in
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the social
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social economic
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 status of some families. Social trips are not a priority. It is
then
 left for the school management to organise and plan
such
 learning experiences for the
children
 as it would provide the opportunity for
children
 who would
otherwise
 not have had a chance to visit Community businesses, Local monuments , and Historic buildings with their own parents to do so. Based on these, I would reiterate my stand stating I strongly agree that pupils learning away from their regular learning spaces at school is imperative and would contribute positively .
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