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Some experts say for road safety cyclists should pass a test before being allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many
columnist
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 has raised the concern for
bicylce
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bicycle
rider
 to learn and go through
exam
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the exam
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 for safety measures. In my opinion, to control the stoppage and accidents on the streets people must understand the basic
traffic
 rules.
Hence
, I agree with
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the experts
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experts
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expert
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 point of view and I will explain
in
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this in
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 the following paragraph with an example. Nowadays, many folks
has
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 started cycling to stay physically fit and it's beneficial for mental health too;
however
, it comes with challenges
which
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that
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 public and state law need to
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take care
takecare
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take care
.
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Firstly
, before riding
cycle
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a cycle
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 in
the
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 public area
one
 must learn the
traffic
 sign and
understanding
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 the basic pathway needs,
otherwise
, there are high chances that
one
 can meet with
an accidents
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an accident
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 and interrupt other bypassers.
For example
,
in
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a recent survey found that around 60 per cent of
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the rider
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rider
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riders
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with
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apply
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lack
of
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knowledge
on
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of
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 the transportation regulation were the main reason to cause
cramp
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cramps
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 by breaking laws.
Secondly
, the government must tighten the regulation for the cyclist before they get on the streets for the safety of
other
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others
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 and
controlling
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to control
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 the
traffic
.
Moreover
,
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the rider
a rider
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rider
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riders
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 should follow the
traffic
 signal,
riding
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ride
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on
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in
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 the dedicated area,
do
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and do
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 not interrupt the public
transports
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transport
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 as well as the hospital vehicles. To exemplify, India reports a
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high
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hight
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high
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 rate of accidental deaths and jam-packed
traffic
 as many of the community are not aware of the land transport law,
this
 is
one
 of the severe
concern
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concerns
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 that most of the countries around
globe
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 are dealing with. To conclude,
traffic
 rules learning and examination must be mandatory for the
rider
 for safety and controlling the crowd
especially
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,especially
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 during peak hours. I tend to agree with the experts introducing rules to go through the test before riding
bicyle
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bicycle
 on the public street, so
one
 will not
distrupt
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disrupt
 other traveller and maintain
safe
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a safe
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 environment.
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