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Some people believe that hard work is vital for success, while others think that education guarantees success more than anything. Which do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Some
people
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 think that hard
work
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 is most important to achieve
success
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, whilst others believe that with an education you can get
success
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 no matter are you hardworking or not. I personally believe that to achieve
success
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 education as well as hard
work
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 both factors are important.
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 essay will discuss my viewpoints in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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 with, there are some reasons that hard
work
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 is important because nowadays there is cutthroat competition among
people
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 and everybody wants to win.
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 win cannot possible without hard
work
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.
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, one of my friends is a state-level topper in the board exam and he is more pressurised by his teacher and parents to do more hard
work
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 to maintain his position. Most of his time he spends in a library to achieve
success
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.
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, some
people
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 think that education makes
people
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 sure of their
success
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. I think, if a person has knowledge of something and do more effort
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 he can achieve
success
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.
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, my cousin angelica was a topper at the university and she had overconfident that I had a degree and I can achieve whatever I want.
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, now she is unemployed because she does not hard
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 to get a job. She just shows her degree to get a job but she has no other skills. To conclude, in my opinion, I think that person can achieve
success
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 If he does hard
work
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 and
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 has the degree to become a successful person in his life.

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