Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people preferto keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

With increasing financial condition and spending power, it is quite obvious that
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and tourism sectors have witnessed drastic improvement. It is argued that some
people
travel a lot and try various cuisines while others prefer their known ones. I believe that it is
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choice to explore various foods and tourist
places
,
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both types of attitudes. It has been said that “ the person who roams around gets honey” which simply
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on
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the importance
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of visiting tourist
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and getting more knowledge. A visit to any place provides cultural information and historic knowledge about different communities and generations.
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,
people
frequently visit
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different
places
and
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various cuisines to get rid of their routine day to
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and get relief from work stress.
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, roaming and enjoying different food is a personal choice. In
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country
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, everyone wants to go on
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tour
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once in
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to explore various aspects of different country and their
people
.
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recent survey shows in 2019, 38 % of young American
people
visited Asian countries while 29% of European
people
visited China. Some
people
do not prefer to visit different
places
and do not consume unknown food with which they are not familiar due to personal insecure feelings. They believe that reading
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historical books and watching videos could provide
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information. In conclusion, I strongly believe that doing
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of various
places
and trying different types of foods enhance historical knowledge and create
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a strong
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bond with various
people
.
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