Even though globalization affects the world's economies in a very positive way, its negative side should not be forgotten. What is your view? Discuss.

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It is believed by some that
globalization
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is the best thing that ever happened to us, while others mainly see the downsides of
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phenomenon. I think that living in a much more connected
world
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than before is a great advantage, but it may
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be very dangerous for our wellbeing.
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of all, thanks to
globalization
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we are more connected than ever, in , the fact it is very easy to
travel
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or visit other countries and social media has really simplified the way we communicate.
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, you only have to switch on your television or computer to receive news from all over the
World
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, which is a very important achievement that we have overcome in the
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twenty years. Being able to gather information so quickly and so easily has increased our knowledge about what is happening on the opposite side of the
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.
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,
globalization
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also
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has its pitfalls, in , the fact
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continuously able to
travel
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all over the
world
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, has
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increased the risks of infectious diseases. Covid-19 is a clear example of it, in , the fact it was able to diffuse so rapidly due to
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and we found ourselves totally unprepared to face
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new threat. Infectious diseases are not the only thing we should worry about
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since now that everyone is connected, it is very easy to share fake news, which they were proven to
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faster than the real ones. A huge example was the 'scientific discovery' that vaccinations can cause autism, even if it was proven wrong a long time ago, nowadays lots of people still believe in its truthfulness. In conclusion,
globalization
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has permitted us to live easily and
travel
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comfortably, but its downsides should not be forgotten. A globalized
world
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is a wonderful place to live in, but only if you do it with respect and consideration. I still hope that one day the negative sides of it will totally disappear.
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