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some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to helo other people. do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
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 thought that the essential part when you are having a lot of money and much wealth is the chance to be able being a giving a hand to other
people
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.
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 essay agrees with the statement because
people
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 cannot get into that stage if they did not receive any help from other
people
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. Of course, it is
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 including many other aspects too like working hard and never giving up.
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, it is impossible if we did that only by ourselves. From my point of view, humans are depending on each other, and we must become sociable
people
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 to be able to survive in
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 stressful world. If we are working really hard but we did not care about other
individuals
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 and only think about ourselves, we did not get caring about other
people
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 too.
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, if we are doing business, we have to communicate with others like buyers or
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. Another example is when we are office workers, we
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 have to cooperate with other workers so the goal can be reached. It is something crucial though, because many
individuals
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 day especially young
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 careless about others, and just think about themselves. They became less respectful of the elderly and become a selfish person. In the end, they tend to become lonely because others did not want to be around them. On the opposite, if we are able to give a hand to another human, it is our opportunity to become a more thoughtful human, and we can learn when we are helping other
people
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 in their lives too. So, in the end, we can have a different perspective on our lives, and maybe it gives us more strength and energy to work harder. In conclusion, humans are sociable
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 and really tend to depend on each other. It is crucial if we have the opportunity to help other
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 we must do it, because someday when things are hard,
people
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 that we help before may be able to give their hand to us.
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