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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extend do you agree or disgree with this stagement.

#people #choices #disgree #stagement
These days, the choice is one of the most crucial things that people want to have.
However
, realistically, it isn’t always the truth that everyone has too many
choices
. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement, and reasons and relevant examples will be given in
this
 essay. One of the important factors that can determine how many
choices
 we have is
money
.
Money
 seems like an indicator of the quality of people’s life. Most of the human population on the Earth doesn’t have much
money
 which can pay for doing the things that they enjoy or for buying valuable products to support their vital needs.
For example
, only those who are wealthy can afford their family to have an opportunity to study abroad, but those who are in the middle class or poor don't have too many
choices
 that are whether study in their own country or uneducated. Another factor is education. It is equipment helping people to survive based on their wide range of knowledge carefully. And that led to having a variety of ways because they can use their knowledge to analyze how many appropriate ways they have.
For instance
, most people who lack a chance to study having to find a job will get only a job that doesn’t use the knowledge. That means they don’t have too many
choices
 for a job and have to accept. In conclusion, I truly believe that not everyone will have too many
choices
 because of two important factors which are
money
 and education.
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