Your local council is closing the children’s playground in your locality as not many children visit the park. Write a letter to the council requesting not to close it

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Dear

sir

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Sir

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madam

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Madam

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, I hope

this

letter finds you well.I am writing

this

letter to request not to close the children's playground, seeing that

this

place

is extremely essential for our early life.

Moreover

, sometimes the adult spends time in

this

environment. It is true that some people do not use it but if I want to discuss

playground

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the playground

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I should say I have been working a lot of time and I am fully busy and

this

place

aids me to keep my children happy by going there and

also

I am relaxed when I go to the playground and

such

of my thinks.

On the other hand

this

environment makes a friendly

place

for the inhibition and we are used to spending time with other neighbours and enjoy with play our child and

speak

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speaking

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toghadar and

also

I believe

this

is the only

place

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keep nice our climate because as you know our city is entirely industry so it is fully vital for ours so it is completely useful for us. Writing for your reply, Thank you for your hard work and dedication. Yours Faithfully, Saeed Foroughi Nia.

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coherence and cohesion

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grammatical range

Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar usage. Review your writing for subject-verb agreement, verb tense consistency, and use of articles and prepositions.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
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therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

190 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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