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Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
As the number of
professionals
 is increasing day by day,
people
 start to discuss
about
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the fact
that
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if they should be trained and
work
 in the same place or they should do their job
in
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everywhere they want. Both of these two views have their own features, I prefer
professionals
to
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who
work
 in
country
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 where they are trained will be convenient and help them promote their skills. On the one hand, when
professionals
work
 in the same environment as they studied , they are familiar with local
people
 and lands,
this
 is the most important factor.
For example
, with the familiarity with
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working environment, it is more convenient to get knowledge and find suitable companies or jobs.
Besides
, there are some careers required to be controlled by local
professionals
.
Therefore
, it should be better to
work
 and train in the same country. On the other hand, some
people
 consider that working abroad can give them
opportunity
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 to receive a great deal of income. With high-paid salaries, they can live easier and more comfortable since
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cost of living is too expensive.
However
, when they do their jobs in other countries, they have to adjust themselves
with
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 different cultures and lifestyles.
This
 not only can make them waste lots of time, but it can
also
 disturb their quality of
work
. To sum up,
although
 working abroad can bring
people
 more income, I believe that
professionals
 should do their jobs in the country where they were trained because of convenience in
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the working
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 environment and good conditions to develop
careness
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careless
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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