some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valueable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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believe  that it is good to  share  as much
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as possible in scientific research, business, and the academic world. Others believe that some
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is too precious to be shared freely.
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believe  that there is  numerous  of
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must have free access to all
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must know everything
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happening in the world or what is hiding in the background. There are
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with
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as various kinds of news, academic accomplishments, etc. Perhaps it is a secret of the state. It might have a bad impact on the country.
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,
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need to know and use crucial
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without paying. It might change their lifestyle and future.
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as academic achievement or the secret of being successful in life. There are numerous advantages to being aware of any kind of
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, accessing
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should be free. Every single person should receive any type of
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. If it's not free,
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can't afford it and can't access
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should be able to learn new things without spending any money. If it is obtained, they will use their skills to the maximum.
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type of
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about education or other topics.
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, there are numerous precious acknowledgements. but we can't sell them with money. Any type of
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should be accessible to the public. Every single person has got the right to access any kind of
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.I believe it  will improve 
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's culture and their awareness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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