Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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poor citizens complain that healthy

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Topic Vocabulary:

preventative care
lifestyle diseases
public health policies
healthcare accessibility
sedentary lifestyle
nutritional information
government intervention
health education programs
public health campaigns
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