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Many people think that every individual is responsible for their own healthy lifestyle. Other believe that governments should take care of it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 of the most disputable issues relates to healthy
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lifestyle
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life
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style
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,supported by reasons for agreeing or disagreeing with the aforementioned statements.
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,considerably outweigh the disadvantages.
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 can be said,it is required that public spending need to be imposed by the states,due to infact
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 will never
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life
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 unless using full services of modern amenities.My
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 notion is that government should allocate resources to improve suitable facilities for their
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lifelong.
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terms of healthy ought to be top of
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 a private issue ,as well as, that it is expected occupants would try based on their personal
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in current
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 poor citizens complain that healthy
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 is their lifelong ambition which they never reach only
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 facilities. As we have seen,there are no easy answers
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 tend to believe it is obvious having
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addressed
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strategies
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventative care
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health policies
  • healthcare accessibility
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • nutritional information
  • government intervention
  • health education programs
  • public health campaigns
  • personal accountability
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