some people believe that experience children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect. other argue that experience is gained when they are teenage have a big influence discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A section of society holds a belief that
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adolescents in the past are more likely will be
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for them, while other
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that the
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will be obtained naturally when they have
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power. In my opinion, every single
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that teenagers experienced will adulting them to be
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person
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in the
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time. On the
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hand,
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is not something that can be purchased,
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however
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it is something that people have to go through in their
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, children have to know some basics of how
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school
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in order to adapt
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school
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environment.
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, the parents need to give their
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exposure
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manners as it
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vital aspect that everyone
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to
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in
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life
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,
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people still turn a blind eye to
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matter as it is not essential at all.
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, it can be seen numerous issues regarding students
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school's
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protocol.
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, it is undeniable that
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power is
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of the prominent
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to acquire the
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, teenagers must at least attempt to hold any position at
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school
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as it might be practical to enhance their leadership
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.
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,
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it is just a mere position, it can be
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a valuable
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that others do not require. Teenagers must grab
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golden opportunity as it once in
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life
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experience
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. In conclusion, despite
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of the way to obtain
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is power,
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theoretically
it is a challenge that
one
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need
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to overcome. I think that acquiring
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is not easy as
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people have to face a
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multitude
of obstacles in their
life
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