1. You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter o explain why you changed jobs – o describe your new job – o tell him/her your other news –

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Dear Anna, Hope you and

family

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your family

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are doing well. I am writing

this

letter to inform you that I have started

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a new

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anew

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a new

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era in my life.

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Last

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last

week I

have

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joined

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Auster

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medicity

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mendicity

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hospital as a senior audiologist. In

september

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first

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applied for the post

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the hospital management conducted

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interview for the applicants. There were ten candidates for the interview.

Fortunately

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with God's

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I could perform well and I got the job offer. The new job is very

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fascinating

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fascinating

. There are two junior audiologists

are

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working

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my team both are very supportive and genuine. Now I have 5 hours duty from

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friday

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Moreover

, the management has offered an attractive salary package for

this

post. On

the

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top of that ,the distance between the

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work place

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and my new house is too less. So it is really convenient for me. In my past

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I had

encounterd

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encountered

severe difficulties in my day

today

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travelling.

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ihave

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have

I have

been suffering

migrain

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migraine

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nowadays.

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, I am happy to tell you that my marriage is fixed. It will be in April

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2023. I will discuss

further

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our

meeting. See you soon. Regards, Krishna.

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7 paragraphs

211 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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